As I remember you...

Beautiful, the memories we own take us to the height and depth to experience emotion in raw unrepenting form. They direct our thought, command our attention, force us to deal with their presence. Just beautifully written.

Such a heartwrenxhing piece

Wow very powerful stuff.

Judging comment
Meena took the readers by emotional storm with this heavy hearten write, teary eyed from start to finish.

The heart weighs heavy when missing the ones you love. Sorrow whispers throughout, leaving endless amounts of anguish and grief. This write hits the heart and soul of the reader. Lovely and elegant, emotional write by Meena!

A gush of memory floods my heart,

- one of the most powerful opening lines I can remember reading. What a great word choice in "gush"

the magnitude of its force
grabs my throat ripping my senses apart,

- another great word choice of "force and grab" again showing how unexpected this memory is, and how it suddenly hits you.

agony of remembering you
leaves me breathless and blue
as I grasp for air to heal my wounds;

- I can so relate to this little part - you have expressed perfectly the pain of remembering a loved one, and have made it feel so raw here!

No shelter can withstand
the monsoon which screams,
weight of your love is so grand
it leaves a lonely theme
I never knew;

- to have a monsoon to represent the tears is amazing, makes the whole loss in this poem seem non-cliche compared to other poems of loss.

The tears I cry within
my broken heart can't bear,
it distorts all view
leaving me breathless and blue
as I remember you

as I remember you...

- lovely repetition at the end of remembering them, and also of the being breathless again, which is how it feels when this memory hits you from nowhere.

I really relate to this poem and I think you have captured this emotion with so much talent. Well done.