Comments : Season's Challenge (Haiku)

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Ingrid

    There's three or four writers on this site who seem to turn senryus and haiku out effortlessly (Michael, Hellon, Larry and yourself) and they are always such a pleasure to read. I have truly learnt so much by reading the pieces that you guys produce.
    This is a wonderful little piece, Ingrid.
    All the very best,
    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Ingrid de Klerck

      It is about you, Ben. I am glad you are the strong kind, that knows how to bend. You passed the test with flying colours!!!

      All the best,
      Ingrid

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well thank you, Ingrid! Now the poem is better still, lol
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    What lovely sentiments you express Ingrid, in just a few words..
    Your poem formed in my mind, a perfect impression of a windy, riverbank setting.
    I loved it!
    You have a real talent for producing poems of very short length, but which express an abundance of feelings in the text.
    A good write. Well done!

  • 1 year ago

    by GB

    It's amazing how the haiku can have the spirit of human nature at its best. I can fully imagine such experience here.
    I just wish you chose a brighter title... It's a gem, Ingrid.

    Thank you so much for sharing :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Ingrid de Klerck

      Thank you so much, dear Samia:)

      You are right, the title was chosen in haste and I will amend that now!

      Love and a hug,
      X Ingrid

  • 1 year ago

    by Hellon

    I love the double meaning in this haiku Ingrid....how very fitting it is in today's current events.

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello my dear,

    Sorry for not commenting sooner.

    The title 'A season's challenge'
    ^
    This sounds both of mother nature and human nature. The challenge ellement being very human; forever trying to better ourselves or at least survive. Where as mother nature is left to fate. This title feel fate has a human hand. This is intriguing to say the least.

    The first sentence sets a vivid moving image and one that is apt. The strong winds that we are currently experiencing blowing across the land causing havoc and distruction. The reed bed sways left and right - much of it rooted firmly; but the threat of loss is inevitable.
    I also feel this force of nature resembles a recent human force of disruction: ISIS. This terroist group blowing a distructive wind across the world. I appreciate this meaning may not have been your intension, but perhaps your subconcious mind played a part?

    The last line, the twist: usually this line, a well known phrase goes like this:
    Bends what it does not break.
    ^
    To make it fit you remove the 'it', but more significant you swap the 'bend' and 'break' around. This changes the impact from soft to hard. This is what makes this line work so well. With such recent mother and human distruction the 'break' is more prevalent and the fallout felt across the world. How can we feel free when our homes and lives are at risk?

    Ingrid, this is to me a deeply complex poem and I commend you for being you and for sharing your wisdom and talent.

    (((Hugs))) xx

  • 1 year ago

    by debbylyn

    Beautiful haiku!

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hello Ingrid. Thank you for checking my poems out and commenting on them. I love this short piece. Beautiful write!