Finally! You have posted this beautiful poem! When I read this in Andrea's contest it just won me over. There's just so much I love about it. I think the repetition of you were old really works here...it seems to emphasize what else you are saying in each stanza. I was also waiting to see which genre you posted it in because, although the focal point is the tree this could also be a metaphor for a grandparent perhaps. That is why I love it so much...stunning write and, most definately nominated!
Thanks, Hellon! I did feel that grandmotherly connection when I wrote this. Though it is about a tree we had in our yard for many years (and was there many years before we moved there) during our childhood. Unfortunately one day after school we came home to find all that was left of it was a stump :(
1 year ago
by Ben Pickard
This really is a wonderful piece of poetry and one that I would add my own nomination to if I had any votes left!
I see below the metaphor for the grandmother and it certainly works well on that level, however, I like the idea that a human can show so much empathy towards a tree so I'm sticking with that.
Wonderful. All the very best,
Feels like it's been forever since I've left a comment on one of your poems. I really love this poem, especially since it's a metaphorical piece, applicable to both nature and humans, you paint life in a beautiful fragile manner, which it is. Now that I think about it, I think I'm a real sucker for your perspective pieces, this reminded me slightly of your other poem, Wildfire, which I absolutely love. beautiful piece!
This is an exquisite piece, although it's originally written for an old tree that was cut down during the author's childhood (as noted by a comment), it's applicable for a lot of other life forms - people and animals. The repetition was not distracting, and served to build up this notion that its death was fine, but the last verse was a welcomed ending that did a 180 with the last verse. This piece is the epitome of a double entendre and it was executed extremely well! Penmanship at it's finest. (10 pts)