Comments : MEMORY/FICTION

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello,
    a winning poem for sure.

    Excellent described metaphor/ simile.

    Well done.

    Michael

  • 1 year ago

    by Saerelune

    Sorry for the delay, but here's my judge's comment:

    "This poem is the epitome of succinct minimalism. I love how "zoomed-in" the imagery is, bringing the reader so close to what the writer herself sees. The simplicity with which the action of splitting an orange is described, along with the ending, almost makes the citrus scent come off the page/screen. It's a short but effective description of a particular sensation which is displayed to us in great detail and suspension. The focus is laid so well on this tangerine that one almost forgets that this is a whole metaphor. I guess this explains the title, I love the subtle comparison. This poem is just incredibly to the point but still manages to give this euphoric/cloudy vibe that is both associated to fantasy and old memories. Well done. "