Comments : By The Lake (Kyrielle)

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Andrea

    What a dark and well rhymed little piece this is in a form I love but am yet to attempt.
    I enjoy the kyrielle simply because of that last repeated line; it really adds to the tone, especially in a dark piece like this - almost like a dreadful lullaby! lol

    Can't rhyme indeed.....:) Pull yourself together woman, you are excellent.

    All the best and speak soon,
    Ben

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Andrea, what a neat form of poetry-beautifully done, love the story you told.

  • 7 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Dear Andrea, I guess each tear we shed has its own story to tell. A lake to me is a beautiful and peaceful place but at night it can be rather spooky. The lake can swallow you and nobody would ever know. You talk about three o'clock am, that's when the evil spirit like to attack. After that is hard to go back to sleep. Beautiful dark write. Be blessed