Comments : I always go on about the moonlight

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Darren, love, love, love this.

    It's so strange that feeling when we fall in our dreams because it gives us butterflies etc.
    A great piece with fabulous imagery.

    Em

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks once again Em,

      I always enjoy reading your comments

  • 1 year ago

    by Red Yoshi

    I also love this as well. At the end i was like holy shit lol. I didn't want the poem to end. The way you tell a story for the reader is incredible, top tier in my opinion.

    Most humans have that falling dream where it is just pitch black in an endless pit. And that does Kickstart the butterflies in your stomach (even though we dont realize it at first). After we wake up the butterflies are still there. The details here are flawless in my opinion, uou really do take the reader on a journey, through your dreams.

    I always find it strange how we remember a nightmare or a dark/sad dream but never a happy one. Hm.

    "Was i riding your emotional coaster"

    Great line to pinpoint how you were feeling either about yourself or someone you care about, this in turn could mean you saw someone suffering and in turn it affected your thought process.

    "It was always dark, damp and humid"

    Another great line to showcase the affects dreams can physically have on us, this shows the reader the thrilling part of the piem in a sense and how the character is in a panic state, and how they can wake up drenched in sweat.

    The moon is the only light that is physically or emotionally in your life or this poem, i love it because you show how scary dreams and nightmares can be. It sets the scene well in my opinion.

    Now that ending. Wow. I was blown away and didnt expect that at all. :). Overall you set the poem well and all the right words are placed perfectly. The metaphors and imagery is set perfect as well.

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks James

      really appreciate your great comment.

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Totally love this! It's amazing how our dreams are so vivid-the falling ones are always so scary! You described it to a T! Well done-

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Brenda

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Darren,

    You always take me to beautiful and sorrowful places with your poetry...love this!!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Andrea

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Still one of the best damn writers on PnQ.

    Just a stunning write.

    That is all.

    Git.

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks mate

      To call me a git has bestowed me with a great honour

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Hahaha this write rocks fella t'is is who is honoured!

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Creeping about again lol this really I'd awesome.

  • 9 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Very beautiful.

  • 1 month ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    That moment when we awake, startled by the dream-fall that never ends - limbs jet skyward for a blink, then subside with a moistening film, well, everywhere. We always remember the light though.