Perhaps You Were

by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko   Aug 30, 2016


Once, dandelion wishes
floated in the air
making symphony through
the colors of broken towns,
and we were once violinists
lost in the incessant flipping
of an hourglass.

Ordinary and trivial,
I wonder how things of that extent
can be unforgettable...
like the way you cross the street,
or the way we run with blisters on our feet.

How can I ever bear
a September without you?
Lilac rains don't greet me anymore,
sunspot-filled,
but these willowed roads weep.

We used to stay up all night
counting cars and chasing dreams,
roadsides flourished,
I never thought they would end,
but once,
they did.

It broke my heart.

Slippers grew weary
and we found refuge on sinfonie --
you thought you were Beethoven
and I was Chopin,

but I wasn't that great...

perhaps you were.

I always knew you were my world,
you gazed up to the crimson sky,
and inch by inch,
your music rose up
like skyscrapers on a field of violets.

I wasn't meant to play Liebesleid with you
neither meant to create symphonies with you --
I was a violinist who couldn't even
hold his bow,
messing up with etudes and interludes.

Still...

You thought you were Beethoven
and I was Chopin,

but I wasn't that great...

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  • 7 years ago

    by hiraeth

    Judging Comment:

    There's a certain haunting beauty to this poem, it's riddled with cruel realizations and a sense of this ambitious love. The mixture of well-chosen metaphors and pacing of this poem has a certain synergy. Interestingly enough, although Chopin admired Beethoven, Beethoven was not aware of Chopin due to the age difference and just because of circumstances (if I recall correctly Chopin just started his career a bit after Beethoven's death). This tidbit paints the ending in a different light, and solidifies the theme of unrequited love. I must admit that I have never stumbled across the piece "Liebesleid" and after listening to it, I really think that this poem reflects the essence of that piece extremely well. There's so many little things stitched into this poem that works really well, and for that reason alone, I consider this a masterpiece.

  • 7 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    This is a beautiful poem! The elegant wording is mixed with nature tones, singing a true melody of emotions.

    The beginning stanza sets the scene full of metaphoric brilliance! I can see vividly the memories of a friendship perhaps, very touching.

    The loss of a friend or loved one echos through this poem and as sad as it is, its so darn beautiful!

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the emotions all rolling and coming together to pour upon the page even upon the reader...touching writes Daishel...I really hope you are okay, take care.

  • 7 years ago

    by stormingdance (Lessa)

    Enchanting and leaves to wonder: unrequited love or lost love? Thanks for sharing this beautiful write!

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Wonderfully stunning. It felt like I was being carried along atop one of your dandelion seeds.

    Well done and take care,

    Michael