Best poem. Write such beautiful poem again.

"As an adolescence" adolescence should be adolescent; but overall, that introductory stanza was powerful and creative. It explained something common in thought, but unique in description. So nicely done there.

Otherwise this piece sheds light on an interesting style of perspective, one that is partially overdone, but at the same time so unlikely to be articulated in poetry. Creative sense of format, and interestingly penned piece overall.

". All she want is to be acknowledge
And experience love. Instead she shunned by the world
Hollow coffin her fate. Lost girl"

It reads better if you put wants and acknowledged
And she's after instead..

Dear hallow dreamer....
Just a few minor changes as I mentioned above and this poem will be outstanding in my book!

You have guts and determination in your soul, I can tell that by your writing!
I admire your courage to put these emotions and experiences onto paper..

Another powerful and raw poem by you, I'm truly loving your poetry!

Again, I am left speechless.