Smoke on the Water

by Maple Tree   May 13, 2017

I blew smoke rings
crossed ripples,
of a lake,
where the echos of my screams
become heroin induced memories.

Dark circles hollow out
the purest form
of what used to hold a smile.

They say;
the pain will fade with time;

all those loose ends
lay untied and I'll never
forget the ugliness of that day....

when I hear this song
and the gutted twang of the
electric guitar.....
I feel everything
all over again.


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  • 1 year ago

    by BlueJay

    Again the imagery in this piece is amazing. Definitely what drew me to the piece and made it stand out so much from the rest in this round of the contest. From what I understand of the song, there are quite a few interpretations that vary from the actual event that inspired the song; but this actually managed to mix them all into one cohesive piece. That alone makes it noteworthy to me. And even more than that, there were tons of great aspects in the actual format of this piece that made me fall in love with this; for example the word choice and the layout, as well as the creative use of the interpretations/vs. actual incident.

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved it x

  • 1 year ago

    by Michael

    Wow! Andrea

    Lovely piece of writing :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I loved this in the contest, Maple, and had an inkling it might be yours. Anyway, I love it even more seeing it up in the glaring lights of the 'poems posted' page.

    Take care and all the best as ever,


  • 1 year ago

    by Pagan Paul

    Amazing how a piece of music evokes such memories, good or bad.
    I was always Black Sabbath rather than Deep Purple.
    Nice woven into the poem Ms Tree.

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