Agreed, I really like this. Punctuation is a little choppy, but who cares, the story and imagery is great. I can smell and taste that lit cigarette from here, and feel the butt of it collapse under my foot.
I agree with them. This is absolutely great! It's like I am in the room watching this person smoking this cigarette and thinking deeply...and I kinda twitched when he stomped it under his feet. The feels.