Comments : I struggle (Cinquain Swirl)

  • 1 year ago

    by ddavidd

    sometimes i feel it is easier to report reality in poetry in all sophistication and angles
    I think poetry has more tools t look deep inside the essence
    here what you said could not be said this clearly by prose

  • 1 year ago

    by Mark

    Poetic, wonderful write for a son anxious to meet the world and mothers worry. Least that's how I see it

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Meena, this is lovely! And it's sad knowing the mothers worry for her child. A life long worry we as parents have. To be able to give your baby wings to soar and wishing you could coat them in armour so they never get hurt.

  • 1 year ago

    by mossgirl19

    Beautifully written Ms. Meena.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ya----Na


  • 1 year ago

    by ether

    beautiful. i feel this transcends the mother-son relationship and can apply to our solo self; i have especially been struggling with grounding myself lately and this poem captures the essence of this shift in elements of my life. a truly refreshing read. well done.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A very well done on this, Meena. Your formed poetry - and knowledge of - puts most of us on here to shame!

    All the best as ever,


  • 1 year ago

    by William Mae

    A wonderful write, the bird that leaves the nest never forgets the love and warmth of the nest and always longs to return.