Comments : The Mistress

  • 3 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    oh this is excellent Mihir! I just love the analogy and so will anyone that's ever struggled with sleep (which is everyone at some point or another!). She is a mistress indeed! Great poem! (I can't get my use of '!!!' under control here! ... lol) :-)

    =^.^=

    • 3 months ago

      by Mihir Deshmukh

      Well thank you so much for reading it! Also if you observe closely even though I'm calling sleep my mistress, I turn out to be her mistress. Also this"!!!" makes two of us!!

  • 3 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Almost midnight here, so so tired and yet sleep escapes me.

    Sleep is not my mistress but my Rainbows End. So so often out of sight and reach.

    Brilliant work

    Craig

  • 3 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A wonderful piece that draws the reader along teasing with imagery of the mistress then the final twist that the illusive mistress is sleep. Well done on a very clever and captivating write. Milly x

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Beautifully rhymed...with a surprise at the end! Enjoyed the piece.

  • 3 months ago

    by Em

    Mihir this is fantastic as always with your works you weave words and sentences together in this majestic way as to take us there with us but this one really tricked me into believing you were in fact waiting for your 'mistress' then bam that ending. It did make me laugh a little as here I am having had like 30mins sleep (01.29 here) and now I'm awake with all the creatures of the night haha

    • 3 months ago

      by Mihir Deshmukh

      Hey Em thanks for all the kind words you always shower me with! And the elusive nature of sleep is something that has troubled us all and tbh she still only manages to come around the dawn of light for me!

  • 3 months ago

    by Brenda

    I really liked this a lot. Excellent play on words. Well done-

  • 3 months ago

    by Mark

    Congratulations on the win!

  • 3 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Congratulations on your win x

  • 3 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Congratulations Mihir :-)
    =^.^=

  • 3 months ago

    by Kasie

    Congratulations! This was beautifully written. I really love the last line, it gave me chills.

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Congratulations Mihir :)

  • 3 months ago

    by AT

    Congratulations mihir

  • 3 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Congrats on the win

  • 3 months ago

    by Purvi Gadia

    oh my goodness, you really are on a roll. two wins. woahhhhh. I'm so happy for you.
    and I need a treat for this. ;)

  • 3 months ago

    by Paul Hirst

    Ha lovely little twist
    Well done

  • 2 months ago

    by C Cattaway

    Brilliant. x

  • 2 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment

    What can I say about this write which has feelings and enticing
    images that takes the reader along with the writer. There was
    sadness and it made me as a reader feel for the writer’s loneliness
    but the ending brought it all into perspective. My…. I really liked
    the way this was penned and how sleep was labeled as a mistress!

    • 1 month ago

      by Mihir Deshmukh

      I am always thankful for your kind words! I remember putting up my first poem on this forum to find your helpful and encouraging comment on it and around three years later I return to find the same on yet another one! Your comments are always cherished. Thank you.

  • 1 month ago

    by Emily Wacker

    Congratulations on the win! Well-deserved!
    -Emily