Comments : A little light will do

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Sometimes
    the moon is just the moon
    the sun just the sun
    the stars are just the stars
    and its enough honey,
    light is always enough...

    I don't know but the way you have written this whole stanza, it looks metaphorical. I loved it.

  • 5 years ago

    by Abed

    Judging comment:

    Indeed, some words are better put in their plain context, with no added salt, not even sugar. Poetry doesn’t need to be ornamented. The author makes uses of simple sentences to send this simple message, perhaps not to PnQ poets, but in general. That’s why, *cough* allow me to make use of my current status as a temporary judge to address poets here. You don’t need to force yourself to write. You don’t need to force yourself onto a piece. Poetry forces itself out of you. I’ve been reading so many pieces lately, ones that sound awkwardly forced, especially the ones that rhyme (let alone the unoriginal rhyme schemes!). Breathe. Take a moment. Can you feel what you have written? As Yakari puts it, “Light is always enough”. I strongly second that. Oh, before I forget. “Its” is missing the apostrophe, Yaki. Beautiful, as always.