Comments : Waning.

  • 6 months ago

    by Daniel

    This would work so well as a spoken word piece. I want to hear a voice carry the emotion that’s prevalent here. You speak of conscription, duty, yet none of the valour or hope that litters the image of ‘fighting’ for your country. Your words carry weight here, and the contradiction of ‘full of emptiness’ is stark. You harbour a lot of discontent for the leaders of your country and it’s gripping in your writing.

  • 6 months ago

    by Michael

    touché on what you were saying in your comments. This reads so well, and resonates with me..

    "each step digs a deeper grave" brilliant line and so profound. A really well told story about how war continues to destroy lives, and the sadness of servicemen and women, who give their lives, then struggle to survive back in society from the aftermath, or as you say soon to be yet another ghost who died for their country, such grief!
    Much love, M x

  • 6 months ago

    by Brenda

    Mary Anne, a hard hitting write, so much truth to this-well done-

  • 6 months ago

    by Jamie

    Congrats on the win

  • 6 months ago

    by Helen Kent