Comments : Watery Grave-Pt.1

  • 13 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Wow! Nice work Holly!

    for the next one, you can make him have amnesia for most of it... maybe introduce siblings or parents to help him thrugh this recovery.... a good idea for the end of part 2 is to repeat the lines you started this one with:
    "He drains his glass and slowly looks around.
    How many more drinks till the memories drown?"

  • 13 years ago

    by Eibutsina

    WHOA chills up and down my spine - im gunna email you about this one stunning piece hun !!!! well worth a five

  • 13 years ago

    by Silent

    Hi Holly
    I will try to work on some ideas
    Chris

  • 13 years ago

    by BOB

    Horiffying, I felt it, God I realy felt it. The saddest thing I read in a while. Somehow I realy feel youre expression.

  • 12 years ago

    by Forever29

    Excellent! A very gripping story. 5!

  • 12 years ago

    by Amanda Bee

    This is just too terribly sad:( Wow! Excellent poem...*eyes starting to water*...Your poetry is magnificent. OK. *Taking a deep breath* I'm summoning the courage to go read part 2 now...

    GREAT JOB!!! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow that was amazing...and very sad.. the emotion of the story was extemely powerful. nice job