Wow! Nice work Holly!

for the next one, you can make him have amnesia for most of it... maybe introduce siblings or parents to help him thrugh this recovery.... a good idea for the end of part 2 is to repeat the lines you started this one with:
"He drains his glass and slowly looks around.
How many more drinks till the memories drown?"

WHOA chills up and down my spine - im gunna email you about this one stunning piece hun !!!! well worth a five

Hi Holly
I will try to work on some ideas
Chris

Horiffying, I felt it, God I realy felt it. The saddest thing I read in a while. Somehow I realy feel youre expression.

Excellent! A very gripping story. 5!

This is just too terribly sad:( Wow! Excellent poem...*eyes starting to water*...Your poetry is magnificent. OK. *Taking a deep breath* I'm summoning the courage to go read part 2 now...

GREAT JOB!!! 5/5

Wow that was amazing...and very sad.. the emotion of the story was extemely powerful. nice job