I really like this one. The first line was particulary captivating, and drew a sense of mystery that simply tugs you in. I think it's about an apprentice of a holy positition.. something like that. I've been trying to figure it out, but my mind's been pretty clouded today... and all I can say is, excellent job.
I haven't been reading these but when I saw you had written a part IV i thought i should go back and read the earlier ones, and I'm so glad that I did.
This isn't your usual style of writing (a storyline) but somehow you make it into a work of art anyway. I don't know if this is an expieriment your doing but so far it's going fantastic.
The piece kept the reader entrance with wonderful imagery and a perfect introduction that was portrayed with emotional thoughts set in a beautiful way. I can't wait to read the rest