Wow, that's really good. Very sad. Can't wait to see more.
~keep it up~

-no more

very good!! 5 ***** stars! please check out my poem "Butterflies" please comment/vote.. thanks a lot.. hugs from september!!

really good poem you have alot of talent *mwah*

once agai i under stood ur point of view but you kind of confused me at the end, where you we're talking about forgiving and a little girl dying. at first i thought you were talking about ur little sister or something, who was abused but then i realized that little girl was you, and you were fogiving a man who hurt you. it was sad but again confusing. ur format was good, but i still couldn't understand where the rhymes or stanzas where

A very powerful piece...a piece that makes you think. You have a talent...keep up the nice work.

Great ending! 5/5
Take care
~Emmy