That was really deep. It seems like u put alot of feeling into this poem. And no matter how it turns out in the end, the feelings of the poem makes it the best. I especially liked the last part of it. Usually when if I make them long like that I begin to fall towards the end. But u stuck to it and put great effort into it. Great job! Keep it up. ANd maybe u can look at some of my past poems when I was depressed.