this poem was a perfect example of free verse. It was also really sad. It was an awesome poem though Im sorry all that shit happens 2 u.

sounds like my life really well wrote i loved it good job

nice poem, i dont hate you, keep up the good work 5/5

i like this poem because i can really relate. great job.

wow i can totally relate to this, i think its a really gud poem keep it up! plz check out sum of my poems thanks xxxxx *Michelle*

AWSOME poem!!! I really liked it! I can kind of realate but not totally!! But good poem 5/5!!=)
Brittney
aka**mysterio~lover**

I get the message, but it will be more effective with a rhyme sceme(i think i spelled that wrong but you get the point).
-Vino

I think Vino's right about the rhyme scheme, preferably at the end line. Your poem is an honest expression of the reality of life..it's blunt and it's good. Aim high!!

That is so true I hate it when people don't see that they are hurting you physically or mentally it doesn't matter it still hurts. I wish I could write like you. your a very good poet keep up the good work

Great poem 5/5

I like your ideas! I dont hate you! love your work! it sort of relate to some part of my life too.