ahhh i see you are trying the different types of poems! thats real cool. i'm going to take a class about poetry prolly my senior year since thats the only time i have to fit it in so far that is where i can learn the different styles. but it's cool that your taking ur own time to figure these all out! congrates to you lol! i did one by myself and that was a tripplet or something like that lol! i rally like the write about brown eyes, i have blue but this is very cool and creative.

~PLP~ lil slam~

It seems to me this piece is trying to describe the look in someones eyes; yet forgot to exactly describe it. You did a great job on this one - but i lost the concept of the brown eyes and beauty. ^_^ Don't change anything though, its still another well written verse.

Luvooo <333.
/Kal.