I like your ideas; they were very original and good. However the rhythm was a bit disruptive with line breaks. I really enjoyed your ideas though and your wording. Keep on writing and stay strong.
luv kt

nice job...very sad...im sorry you feel this way...5/5 eep it up...luv yas mwah

-kayla-

very well written. very sad.
keep up the good work.
crystal