Very good... keep up the good work.. =D 5 stars for this one.. hugs

Good write.. at the start it was a bit bleuah.. but it was worth reading for the last line alone... I quite liked it.. I don't particually like love poems but you captured this one quite well....

The only thing that really bugged me is that for ARE or YOU you use R and U - i don't like reading all the short hand... i think it ruins the poem.. but it didn't ruin yours....

Well done... Loved the last line!

Keep writing

-Lyd

This is another really good poem. Your poetry sounds so professional because of your large vocabulary i love it. but i dont like the using r instead of are i used to do that but now i think its kind of lazy and it doesn't go along with how mature your writting is but i mean i really love your poems they make you (or at least me) think. and you were so right i do you my poems to as kind of a alternative to cutting and i also know im a terrible speller i need to work on then good job