You said in your profile that you wanted people to read this poem. I can see why. I really like the way you write. You're very gifted. take care xoxo
12 years ago
by .tiana áƒ¦ laura.
I FOUND IT! i love this poem its soo beautiful. As i read it i got shivers up my spine... t'was amazing and i loved every word of it! i cant say that i liked the beginning most, or the end most... because i just loved it all!!! you also used original metaphor-type thingsss... like the little boy and the lazy cat haha... like i already stated lol.... B E A U tiful!
This is good....xoxo xoox i loved this poem....
thanks a bunch for hte comment
yeah im deffinitly gonna keep it up..i actually wrote a new poem today durin spansish cuz i got bored outta my mind...but i shouldve payed attention bcuz i have a quiz in there tomro.....lol...hope to talk more...
I think it's pretty original. The way you were able to include all these different moments in time without breaking the rhythm and flow is astounding.
You convey a pretty valid message, the world has lost touch with reality it's as if we're going backwards instead of evolving further.
Quite thought provoking piece...
Take care and keep it up~Holly
Thought i would be nice and read some of your stuff.
Your criticism is taken well and i shall try hard to write something along the lines of a "subject" you might like. JUst thought i'd also add that although this poem has very good description and imagery, the subject i thought has been overwritten into insensibility and has been done many times before, nice try though ;)
I really liked this poem I think it was mostly the style you use that I was drawn too. And if you want to see a story in my poem, you should play the game. Plus I would recommend it highly. Trust me there's a story there. Keep up the good work, i look forward to more of your poems..