Comments : When

  • 12 years ago

    by X~ BrOkEn BeYoNd RePaIr ~X

    Oh my god.. this poem is fantastic.. out of all your peoms i can't see how this isn't the most highly rated... it took my breath away, YOU have the way with words.

    Amy...X

  • 12 years ago

    by Cimara

    You said in your profile that you wanted people to read this poem. I can see why. I really like the way you write. You're very gifted. take care xoxo

  • 12 years ago

    by .tiana ღ laura.

    I FOUND IT! i love this poem its soo beautiful. As i read it i got shivers up my spine... t'was amazing and i loved every word of it! i cant say that i liked the beginning most, or the end most... because i just loved it all!!! you also used original metaphor-type thingsss... like the little boy and the lazy cat haha... like i already stated lol.... B E A U tiful!
    xo adge

  • 12 years ago

    by tiffany

    That is a great poem and i think u have great talent and the poem is so true!!! check some of mine if u could!

  • 11 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I lovvve it. Good style, excellent depth this is brilliant. XXLISSA

  • 11 years ago

    by Dreaming_Awake

    I can say that i do love this poem its a little diffrent and thats what i like about it. keep up the good work and what not 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Razorblade

    Excellent. Very deep. 5/5

    -Taylor

  • 11 years ago

    by xXx Expecting xXx

    This is good....xoxo xoox i loved this poem....
    thanks a bunch for hte comment

    yeah im deffinitly gonna keep it up..i actually wrote a new poem today durin spansish cuz i got bored outta my mind...but i shouldve payed attention bcuz i have a quiz in there tomro.....lol...hope to talk more...

    xoxo
    elissa

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha Jayneee

    Your such an amazing poet xxxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Kelc

    This is AMAZING! i really can not explain how much talent you have.

  • 11 years ago

    by Koriey Korrupted

    Wow, its reafreshing to read something that has truth and logic.You took this poem as fairy tale and twisted it with reality.Beautiful.Your a great writter.

    Corie

  • 11 years ago

    by fastforward

    Well.
    arent you just amazing.
    i wish i could put my feelings out half as well.

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    I think it's pretty original. The way you were able to include all these different moments in time without breaking the rhythm and flow is astounding.
    You convey a pretty valid message, the world has lost touch with reality it's as if we're going backwards instead of evolving further.
    Quite thought provoking piece...
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 11 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    WOW
    thats all i got
    but i REALLY REALLY love this one
    so real...yet so fake
    ~Emma

  • 11 years ago

    by Marcus

    Thought i would be nice and read some of your stuff.
    Your criticism is taken well and i shall try hard to write something along the lines of a "subject" you might like. JUst thought i'd also add that although this poem has very good description and imagery, the subject i thought has been overwritten into insensibility and has been done many times before, nice try though ;)

  • 11 years ago

    by XxChelseaXx

    This it great. I love it

  • 10 years ago

    by adroit

    Excellent. Excelsior.

  • 10 years ago

    by Darci

    I really liked t. well written! i can relate except that i'm not a boy. lol.
    but very good indeed

  • 10 years ago

    by LostEnigma

    I really liked this poem I think it was mostly the style you use that I was drawn too. And if you want to see a story in my poem, you should play the game. Plus I would recommend it highly. Trust me there's a story there. Keep up the good work, i look forward to more of your poems..

  • 10 years ago

    by BIGDreamsReba

    I loved this poem.