Excelent poem john i really like it thanks for shareing it

Hey, the almost sinister darkness of it was very nice! Yes, I liked this one, great language!

Good Writing!
beth.

Wow, i really like this one. it was very dark. you did an amazing job.
crystal

Wow, i really like this one. it was very dark. you did an amazing job.
crystal

I like the ghostly image you have painted in my mind.

I like this line the most:

"Their muttering protests, their whispered oaths
And all that spells their living in distress."

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

Lovely !!
gave u 5/5 !!

The only honesty i can give you is maybe to add a footnote and explain this poem while i understand i could take the time to really go over this poem and find some kind of meaning it may have nothing to do with what you wanted it to mean...this uses pure metaphors entirely so i think maybe i tiny bit of an explanation is required just so we arn't reading words that we can't make sense of...ya know?

other then that you did give off a very cold and chilling theme which was great your vocab is very nice...good job its great writing

I like where you're going with this, wouldn't mind hearing a bit more in fact.

I liked it!

Jacs
xxx

I didnt really understand, but at the same time i kinda did..n wat i got was gr8! so i give u a 5/5 anyway.
~*Who Cares?*~

Oooo, creepy I love it! ^_^ Def a 5.

Great poem painted a really vivid image in my mind

I really like this poem! 5/5

This was really great! Excellent poem!
You've got talent =)

Beautiful....great job....i loved it....
keep it up...
Emma 5/5