Amazing poem!!! although you've never been raped, you got the emotion across amazingly... i was physically abused when i was 6 by someone in my school and thats exactly how i felt for so long... ive finally been able to move on, but thats how i felt for many years. anyways, great poem! keep it up!
I was raped and it was amazing how you knew how it feels. Thank you for putting into words
12 years ago
Awww...thts so sad. i was nearly raped. i manged to escape just in time but i know how it feels and u really described the suffuring afterwards very well. alotta emotion in there. could ya plz read my rapeture poem called "Haunting me for eternity" thx.
A very moving poem. however, you need to stop using words that cheapen your poem "sappy". you have some great ideas but the rhyming can be a bit predicible. i still really liked this poem, but i think its suposed to go in rape stories?
Excellent excellent excellent. i hope this isnt true, but if it is i am very sorry. that was a gr8 poem, it had a gr8 flow to it, and the rhyming wasnt forced anywhere. definately keep up the gr8 work! 5/5!
Again a good idea, but your style is messy and your rhymes in every poem are very very simple, using a rhyming dictionary and a thesuarus isn't cheating or anything this is what they are made for so much of this was soooo forced the part that was the worst to me was this
Are you happy
Now all I can be is sappy
that really dosn't even make sense sappy means to be silly, or like mushy and sentimental....if someone raped me i'd be pissed off and sad not sappy...so yeah very forced imma go with a 3/5 i didn't really like this
Awww! That was so sad. Did this really happen to you, or do you know of someone who felt this way? Either way, excellent poem! Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more from you. Check out my poems sometime!
Your rhymes in this poem seemed very forced and I suggest you don't do that often or at least avoid doing so. I know we all switch words around to make it rhyme, because I do it too, but it doesn't mean it's a good thing.
You topic of death and rape is very cliche, but there were some parts of the poem that reallt caught my attention.
Really really really good. keep writing. love the last part: This is for the better
That is why I'm writing you this letter
Every word of this feeling is true
All I can say now is that...
I love you-LOVE IT