Very good... at the beginin i thought ray was a person ... lol ... but very good poem... 5/5

Wow lol. tht was really good n like pizie said i thought ray was a person too. tht was really good n how its set out n tht. 5/5
from becca x

Really well written peice.

5/5

Hey I don't know what to say. (Once again). This poem is awesome. The only things are the format cuts off the flow a little bit and you spelled decided wrong. Other than that great poem.

I like the way you used 'Ray' , very cunning.
I agree with danika, quite dark!
nice poem xxx

Honey i was a little confused thru it. but it's still good. i gave it a 4/5. thanks for commenting on my poems. i'm returnign the favor now.