I really like it. But the the flow sort of changes from beginning to end: some of the lines are longer and sometimes sound a little awkward. but on a whole i love. maybe a little reorganiztion is my suggestion. the second stanza is my favorite
This had a different ending to what I expected. And, That's a good thing. It wasn't predictable. I thought this was a great poem. If only all girls were like this. I thought it was great. Keep it up! 5/5 And thank you for your comment.
P.S. Incase you don't know what name I used for the other poem. This was it..
-*Â»TaLeEe! ( F P C D ) at 2006-06-27
If you go in your poem and click on that name, it will take you straight to my profile. Just so you know I'm not lying. =)