Such a sad poem. But I thought it was really good. I really liked how you kept repeating that one same line throughout the poem. It really gave it so much more strength to it. Keep it up the great work. You're a great writer. And thank you for your comment. =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

"cant keep quite" should probably be "can't keep quiet"...

"I cant remember the date" should be "can't" again. Apostrophes. ;)

"I fall to hard to readily" should be too's instead of to's.

"Aimlessly I wondered" do you want "wandered" or "wondered" here?

"Ive made my mistakes and ill make many more" Apostrophes for I've and I'll. :)

I really like the message of this poem. I'm just a complete grammar freak so I find errors in everything. I hope you're not offended :)