Nice job!!!

Wow, to have your heart broken is something no-one should have to go through, but still it happens, every mimute, of every day!

P.s. i really liked this! 5/5!

All i must say is that to go through it quickly for mistakes, for example you wrote "you" and i think you meant "your". I also think that if you added some sort of rhyme scheme, it would feel much more powerful. Other than that i really liked your concept! Keep it up!

xxEvilAngelxx

Aww i thought it was gonna turn out good but thats soo sad. very creative though. ur a GREAT writter keep it up 5/5 always
Kate~

Awesome......:)