The rhyme sceme helped to make the last line stand out...
I thought this poem was really sweet but sad and emotive

Great job :)

I'm sure David would love this poem(= I can tell you really like him from the quality of this poem. Good job!

It need a bit more umph behind it but the rhyme and structure were intact...made me go awww....it was charming to read.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Awh, very sweet and sad type of poem. I liked it though, so no fears.