Wow.. that was excellent! definetely 5/5! it showed how you were really feeling and it flowed well! brilliant work!

The words are well chosen and run well thoughout, the flow is smooth and the content well expressed with good progression thoughout.

the last stanza does not seem to run as well as the rest, which is a pitty as it takes away some of the peices overall power. but it is only a minor flaw and does not realy efect the overall peice too greatly

Such a sweet poem, a poem of hope