I loved that poem, the second stanza was my favourite and i loved how you repeated the last 2 lines of every stanza, the flow was very good and the rhyming was plain but catchy.
overall a very good poem, keep writing, my friend
The poem was good and the repetition of the final two lines worked well. It did have some good descriptions. I'd suggest maybe limiting the words she and her. And also maybe read over the line that has both heart and apart in the same sentence.
Hey, I like this poem a lot. I love the layout of it and the great descriptions really gave the poem a good flow. I think the repetition of the last two lines in each stanza is really effective. Well done!
Very well done! I love most of your poems lol. I am so sorry if that's true in any way. I know how a person can hurt you. Don't give up. Someone will most likely be out there for all of us. =) Ok...back to the poem lol...I liked the rhythm (sp) and it rhymed very well. Keep up the good writing. Hope to see some more soon =)
Another great write. ur are very good at rhyming and the flow to this poem is also very strong, i like the repetition of the last 2 lines in each stanza, it might be nice if the final two lines were different tho, just to finish the poem nicely.
I love this poem! You described everything so well.. and I like the repetition of the last two lines in each stanza. It gave it a nice effect. My favorite stanza would have to be the last. I loved the whole poem though.. Great job on this! 5/5
Wow!!! Talee that was amazing, I am completely and totally speechless..So this is not going to be long, the imagery was perfect i loved how the ending lines were all the same, it gave it great affect! i absolutely loved it! 5/5
Wow Nat, that is definitely different from any poems I have read from you. Haha, I've obviously said this a million times, but you are talented!! That is why you are my SMAWCE buddy!! and now, my new little sister :P hehe!.. You really described everything so well in this poem. Your rhymes were also great and so was the flow. Awesome job!
Excellent poem. I loved how you wrote "Bleeding mascara is all that she's now prone to,
After all of the things you had to put her through." at the end of each stanza, that really gave it an added touch...5/5
The repitition had an interesting effect, as it does relate to the title. The meaning is well interpreted and the words tie together nicely, it was easy to understand what was going on, and it wasn't pointlessly random [which is good]. Although I always considered depression from loss of love pathetic this poem is a good read.