This was beautiful I think her husband shall be punished. Because of him that child never got to see his first birthday or have his first tooth pulled. All because his daddy didn't love mommy anylonger.

I loved your word choice, it was brilliant, appropiate, and poetic. I also liked the theme of your poem, and the way it's written, very original. I really could imagine everything you described, and it made me feel a little sad about it.

Great job! 5/5

Keep writing.

XoXo
Gaby

Yes, I know that story too, it's terrible how some people in this world can be so...brutal and unfeeling. Wonder Job!

This poem was really sad.
It blew me away, the content was strong and powerful. The imagery was frightening.
A sad story behind it, one that we never want to live ourselves.
Well done
xxxxx

Wow. Kaylee this was amazing. It was really sad though. I really enjoyed reading it, and it reminds me of how people can be so cruel..

Anyway, great work.

Not your usual teenage poetic fare, I'll give you that.

This has good diction, punctuation, flow and melody which is very rare on this site so you can pat yourself on the back for that.

Bret

*she begins to tear up* that's so sad!