Wow this is really good. i can kinda relate.

Awh, wow, that was really good hun.. The flow worked well, and your descriptions told your story to us yet still left it a mysteryy.. The emotion was clear and strongg..

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^ This line seemed a little off to me.. It didn't flow as well as the others.. Try making it longer maybe or something..

Nicely done 5/5