Comments : Cut Deeper and Deeper

  • 11 years ago

    by Rachael

    This is a really good poem..the same thing happened to me last year. xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Shannon

    Thanks, It's my favorite one out of my poems, so I stuck it on :)

  • 11 years ago

    by HalfMoon

    Thought I might leave a comment, just so you have it in writing and, despite that, I'm too lazy to vote right now, though I will rate it in the comment for evaluation purposes, etc.

    You might want to work on your grammar and spelling [amongst many other things]. Also, you’re stanzas are inconsistent and the poem’s structure isn’t sound. But other than that it was great effort.

    You should put some of your other work on.

  • 10 years ago

    by Noel

    Wow. I gave up cutting tonight. I helped myself and I got rid of everything. But that doesn't mean i'll never lose my mind and do it again. I liked the poem a lot. Its quite similar to a book I read the other day called Cut.

  • 10 years ago

    by Shannon

    Oh true, I'm glad you stopped cutting. I used to cut to, but then my friends helped show me that there was better ways to cope with everything =]

    I had 2 change the poem a little - its better now lol. I wrote it when i first started writing poems, so it kinda sucked. =]

  • 10 years ago

    by Taz

    Omg ur poem has a lot of emotion i love it

  • 9 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hiya Shannon,
    You had me captivated to read on at the first line - Cut deeper' My body tingled with horror and by trhe end I was almost in tears.
    I remember self harming before the age of ten. I remember feeling so angry, helpless and out of control. Hurting myself seemed to release/ relieve my pent up frustrations.

    I hope you are well and life is better.