Comments : Dont let us die

  • 11 years ago

    by twisted reality

    I gave you a 4/5. I thought that the poem wasn't really flowed all the well, and some of the lines went too long, while others went too short.

    [What you think of me now...before]

    ^^I really didn't understand that line...It's talking about now, but before...Before what? And I don't understand how you can talk about 2 tenses at the same time. It confuses people. Keep up the writing! =) 4/5 xox


  • 11 years ago

    by Kristina

    Aww this is a really sad but sweet poem. it had emotion in it and it was good.

    But do you still think its not to late
    To hold me like you did if I was up late?

    having 2 lates at the end threw the poem off a little. maybe try a different word for one of them? i dont know it just didnt seem right.

    but it was an great poem =] 5/5