Comments : A Friend

  • 11 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Hehe.
    That's cuuuute.
    Very nicely done.

  • 11 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    A good idea of comparing the do's and don't of friendship.

    You could write dissin' or dissing, have it rhyme and put it in the friendship area where it belongs.

    The anti-trust line is hard read and doesn't really work that well, so I would suggest re-writing it and trying to shorten the line to make it fit with the rest of what you have written.

    The end is a little weak, a poem shines or fails on it's last line and you can make a better statement about friendship than you have here.

    Nice effort.

  • 11 years ago

    by cutytothebuty

    I really like it, your whole poem is true
    and its really well done, i am sure if you'll wrk a bit more on the rhyme the poem will flow easily and will be perfect

    but i love it

  • 11 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Hahah, quite right.. friends are all that and so much more.
    p.s. I know that you are new, but I might as well warn you that it's against the rules to ask for comments except in forum situated on the discussion board called request comments... but don't worry hun. Keep on writing, practice makes perfect, as they say, and you have quite a bit of talent :-)

    //T.L.//

  • 11 years ago

    by Letty

    I agree with that. I know how you feel
    I've had so many back stabbing,
    supposingly friends in my life that its
    just plain riddiculous. Your amazing.
    I really hope you know how talented
    you are. Please don't let your talent
    go to waste.

    Love
    Letty

  • 11 years ago

    by LoveYourMan

    I really like this...great job!...its soo cute...dissin...lol...i love it!...hope to hear from ya!
    byez

  • 11 years ago

    by ~Ashley Danielle~

    That is cute and you must be a good friend cause you what one is but dont get to much.

  • 11 years ago

    by jello

    Very cute
    this is so true

  • 11 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    Great poem and all that is so true by the way =] 5/5 keep it up.

  • 10 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    It's cool and i agree it's true
    Keep on writing

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    The repition in this poem strongly cemented how you wanted the reader to feel. more emotion and meaning was issued.

    well done. keep writing please.

    5/5 David