Wow thats an awesome poem! i really liked it..........5 for me, if i could vote 100, i will! short, but you put all the emotions that you need.....it's perfect

That was pretty good, but not very clear.. The flow worked well, as did the rhymes.. The descriptions were very detailed and you presented them nicely.. Great job 5/5

Alex,
That was cool and sensitive. You are in touch with your heart and the feelings just flows through unhindered. A beautiful poem. Keep up the good work!

A full stop would end it well :P
i like the short phrases in ths poem they are very powerful. and the rhyminhg and alliteration adds even more emphasis. nice one :)

xx

Maybe it could do with a good end,but don't change the poem as it is, 'cause it's good :)
"Real world pushed aside." i like that, well found
very well done
keep it up :)

I like it alot. It's very expressive.
Thankx for commenting on my poem
~ kassie~

Wow i love that poen its so touching.:)

Woww very nice imagery i could really feel wat u were feeling when u wrote this. exellent =) god job

This is Awesome, i give it a 5/5

Thanks for reading my poem and commenting. i didn't think anyone read them. and i love this poem! i've sacrificed a lot for love, too

Aww it's gooood ;]

Wow this is great keep it up!
Rowena

I love it. Its awesome. Wow. You are a talented writer i must say. Keep it up. =]

Great poem.I really liked it. Its well structured,too. Good job. You rock my entire sock drawer ^^ *rates five*

Wow this is great poem, i enjoyed reading..by the way i just wana say thanks for for reading my poems.. honestly i love to read your poems keep on writing

Yeah the poem was great and it was really emotional, im gunna read your other poems, keep up the wonderful work! your really going somewhere with this, but you seem so sad in the poem

An amazing poem....it almost got me to tears.....I love it, and all your poems are wonderful....keep it up, cause your good....:)))

The Sacrafice of love hurts so much but needed so dearly.

I love it, your second stanza was the most touching, especially the line
Real world pushed aside because that's how deep it gets......

Excellent!

Hey ima bout to submit ANOTHER that would maybe give you an idea of how to end yours....
Its a really good talent you have there... good to know you're in touch with your inner emotions!!!

Bianka
xxx

Hey sorrry...... It's called....... Black Rose.