Comments : Goodnight Moon

  • 11 years ago

    by Amber Parker

    I like this. It's kind of like a twisted lullaby. Kind of sad.

    I hope you write more soon :)

    ~Scarlett

  • 11 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    ...Sad...and pretty...Not exactly something I like but it's interesting. The beginning was well done and nicely tied into the others. So then there's the part with the "goodnight" that really captures attention.
    ~Faith-less

  • 11 years ago

    by Tammie

    I really like this. It's sad, and really well written. I think it flowed flawlessly, and your emotions were expressed very well. The only thing i think might sound better, is in the third stanza, second last line:
    A girl can only take so much
    Let me downs.

    I think instead of much it should be many. Just a thought. Very good poem though, please keep writing, your very talented. =] 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by NothingGoldCanStay

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    Love this poem.
    Quite dark. M'm. Good.

    Take care. Ly.
    N-G-C-S.