Wow! amazing work!
Wow!!!! i honestly dont know what to say! brilliant poem!
i like the last stanza, well done!
Your rhyming was great and the flow was perfect, i honestly wish i could give you more than 5 for this one.
Wow. The last stanza was amazing, I loved the metaphor there.. Tell your friend that that is a great quote. You really did well on this poem, the flow was pretty good, the descriptions and rymes worked well and the emoiton was strong.. Nicely done sweetie 5/5
10 years ago
by Robie Lincer
Wow... amazing poem!!!
the flow was amazing... umm... i dont really know what to say!!!! they way you wrote it,,, i mean WOW!!! 5/5 and not lower than that at all... i really dont know what to say!!! i am speachless... really!!!
Not too bad... I'll be honest, it is very cliche and the flow was off. Those are probably why it got downvoted... But, I'll give it a five since you helped me. To improve: Don't go for cliche rhymes, and read it to yourself outloud; make sure it doesn't seem broken. Good luck.