Comments : Remembering A Soldier

  • 11 years ago

    by lexy

    GREAT!! thispoem almost made me cry. its really sad. my dad went to war in iraq for 8 months and he is back now and safe at home. but it makes me sad to hear this becaue that would be me and my family if he had died.i am very lucky that he is alive.

  • 11 years ago

    by katie!

    Wow, that was beautiful.
    I have always been to Remembrance day and I certainly think you did it justice with this poem.

    I enjoyed the theme you used and the story. It genuinely touched my heart, and it is good to know that people still remember.

    Well done, A great write on a touching subject.
    XXXXX

  • 11 years ago

    by Amanda

    Wow, very powerful, good poem to read. I like the way you wrote it, my ex boyfriend went out to war and he came back ok but the worry was a great stress to my life. I was touched by this poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jessica

    AWWH. That was sooo sad hun. Omg, the flow was amazing. The descriptions well done and the emotion really strong. Great job sweetie. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh wow...this one did actually make me cry.
    It was very well expressed and heart wrenching, and I loved the imagery, flow, rhyme scheme and wording.
    Never give up your talent, hun.

  • 11 years ago

    by Katlynn

    Amazing job. very sad but it's very true. i do believe with the soliders. There's a mistake in your poem i do believe when i was reading this.

    "but when he turned to her mother, he saw a sad and silent tear"

    it should be

    "but when he turned to HIS mother, he saw a sad and silent tear" not her mother.

    but another then that you did an amazing job.

    keep it up. keep on writing. love always && forever. Also thank you for the commenting my poems means alot to me.

  • 11 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Very nice poem. And a sad one. My boyfriends dad died in the war in Iraq so this poem means alot to me and I am sure would mean alot to him. Keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by ellewen

    That is amazing!!! It gives you a view point of what I think to be a small child, I really like that. And it is visual. That is always a plus. I also like how you rhyme. Great Job! Keep it up ;)

  • 11 years ago

    by Melissa

    I loved this poem, and i understand that a loss that big can effect the world and for you to remember and show how you fell about it with a poem means a lot to many people.

  • 11 years ago

    by Bryan

    Sad but this is a very good poem, great feeling and emotion, i give it a 5/5!!! you've truely have talent so keep it up!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by donna

    This poem was so sad, it brought tears to my eyes.
    It was superbly written, and writing from a childs point of view always makes it that much more powerful to the reader.

    The flow and rhythmn were excellent.. everything about this poem was truly amazing.. well done 5/5 xx

  • 11 years ago

    by emmerz

    I loved this poem! the only thing was that you switched between verb tenses, i.e. it went from present to past then back again, but otherwise, a phenomenally (sp?) written piece~

  • 11 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Great one, you have done a brilliant job on it, keep it up.........5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    This poem tells a really good story. Very honourable of you to write a poem of Rememberance. The battlefields of graves are there to teach us a lesson, but we will never learn.

    The poem started off a little shakey when you write 'side' and 'outside', but the rest of it was great. Keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by ForeverGoneInYourEyes

    You did it again great flow it all went together and i could picture it all in my head nice job 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Darcie

    I had goose bumps the whole time reading your poem. It was so beautiful. Really good job.

  • 11 years ago

    by tiffany

    Good good. i love ur poems!

    x3Tiffie

  • 11 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    Wow, that is amazing! its so so sad! you almost made me cry!
    Wonderfuly written and verry well rhymed.
    The flow was perfect the whole way though.
    Wow! definatly a 5/5 from me
    keep it up

    ~Murder.

  • 11 years ago

    by Esther

    I like, long but i iiked! it was good! lol

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Excellent penmanship...sad,amazing write...very sad yet there were a few grammar erors though but the emotions portrayed were strong
    Good job!
    5/5
    xxPoojaxx