Comments : Temptation's Angry Flame

  • 10 years ago

    by tinna

    Wow!yet another brilliant poem by u with so much feeling, it captures the reader..

  • 10 years ago

    by Tammie

    This is such a good poem. You kept me interested the whole way through, and the title is eye-catching too. Great word choice, not too simple, but not too complicated, it made the poem easy to read, but with great description. Excellent, unique poem. Keep it up. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Karl,
    This is a excellent piece you have written. Your word choices were great. The flow. Everything about it was great. It was also a pleasure to read. I love the way you used the last line as your title. Excellent!

  • 10 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I LOVE this. Seriously, it was amazing. Great choice and usage of vocabulary throughtout, great rhyming, quite dark, and the description is excellent! I loved the flow of it, the lanuage usage and the structure. It all comes togerther perfectly. Cant think of a thing bad about it, keep up the great work and i really look forward to reading some more. xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Laura

    Karl, WOW...
    That was an awesome read. I loved the poem and it was intriguing straight thru to the end. I love how you ended it, using the last words for the title.
    Another thing I thought was very original was the style used...everyother line was a rhyme and it wasn't forced....most times you see the second and forth lines rhyme.
    Very pleasurable read and very unique.
    You do got mad skillz with a pencil my poetic friend...5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Rona

    Hmm..I'm not sure I've said this before, but you're really, really talented! Oh my, what a poem! I love the imagery and your words were so deep. I love how you wrote this poem! And the title is great! One small thing I'd like to point out:

    "But it will already be *to* (too) late, when you realize,"

    Heehee!
    Anyway, just thought I'd point that out! Overall, this poem is very very well done! It's such a great read!
    5/5 =)

  • 10 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Wow. It amazed me how many large words you put into here, but still having a flow to te poem at the same time. Not many people can do that.

    I thought the flow was a little off in the first stanza the most, but otherwise I liked it a lot. There was true emotion and brains as well. =P You didn't just 'write.' You thought of what it was going to look like, and I like when poems are thought out before people write. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 10 years ago

    by Mandz and Aly

    Hey i really like this poem i can relate awesome 5 all the way Mandz

  • 10 years ago

    by Leanne

    WOW!!
    First of yours i've read though i have been told your poems are good, i just found that out for myself, this poem was fantastic.
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    The words you use, gee. are unique and perfect. suits the topic and story line of this poem very well.

    i voted and gave it a 5. excellent.

    david

  • 10 years ago

    by Sandra D

    This poem is amazing! You were so discriptive, you're an amazing writer!. 5/5!

    *Shawte*

  • 10 years ago

    by Taylor

    I tend to like poems with lines in them that act as adjective or adverb clauses. Just saying something, anything, that hits within the same ballpark of what you're feeling, that leads people to a vague understanding.. thats what I got from this one. Yes, it was about temptation, but you could have said those things about any other negative feeling or idea and it would still make perfect sense. Good job (again..)

  • 10 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    This is an amazing poem.. its got great rhyme and flow.. its great detial and has a great ending.. i know you dont like one liners.. but i really dont know what to say... its good and there absolutely nothing to be critiqued..

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow..
    I loved this, I thought your use of vocabulary and imagery was astounding.
    The rhyme scheme and flow worked very well (as always)
    I have nothing bad at all to say about this.
    Excellent work.

  • 10 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is a really good poem karl, love the flow, especially the ending lines, i give it a 5/5!!! please keep it up, your very good at this!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Great imagery in this one. I especially liked the last stanza:

    "In time you'll finally recognize,
    The consequences of your evil game,
    But it will already be too late, when you realize,
    That you fell - To Temptations Angry Flame."

    Nice job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, very nicely written. I loved it. The use of your words were great. The flow as well as the structure was good. Keep up the amazing work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is a greatly written poem with a perfect flow, you have done a amazing job, keep it up.

  • 10 years ago

    by Bianca

    Hey sorry i haven't talked to you in a while its that my computer got messed up and i can't get on it. but that poem is sooo good.. keep it up..

  • 10 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Wow, This was very nicely done. I absolutley loved it. It was very intriquing. I don't see one thing wrong with this. It was so perfect. The imagery that it painted in my head was so beautiful & amazing. Excellent Job. Keep it up, Hun.

    Bri.x