Comments : It ain't about fireworks it's about revolution

  • 10 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    Great poem.
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    When Francis Scott key wrote "the bombs bursting in air"
    he wasn't writing about pretty little fireworks with it's flare
    I liked those two lines best (: Btw; the apostrophe in it's isn`t suposed to be there xD

    Lincoln, Roosevelt, Truman, our hero's do not end there people
    "Heroes"

    I feltl ike a couple of the lines were too long near the middle, but it was still a good write . And the words spoken in this write; so true .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    I really liked this one, actually better that, fight for inependence! Very good David! kudos!

    your slave also,
    -Liz-
    ~luv ya bunches~

  • 10 years ago

    by Chemistry

    The title instantly caught my attention ^_^
    You're right too. We often forget the true significance of holidays. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Another grea t write of your, anbd your so rigt, holidays are now alll about what people can get out of them, not about what started them
    nessa

  • 10 years ago

    by Catie

    Thts awesome---i agree

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Now this...this is amazing.
    The meaning behind this piece was beautiful..imagery created was breathtaking, really created vivid pictures for me.

    I thought the flow was good throughout except for "with britian lost many a friend."
    It just sounds of to me. Maybe try With Britian, lost a friend?" or something similar?

    But apart from that, this was beautiful.