Comments : Society's Fall

  • 10 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Your words are spoken well in this truth filled poem. Were in a downhill spiral as a society but individuals can make a difference . Very good poem!5

  • 10 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    Wow, how you really bring things to light. It's sad how the law plays tricks on the innocent.
    Nice work.

  • 10 years ago

    by LostANDConfused

    This is totally true too. Atleast someone is able to see that our society isn't all that it's cracked up to be. Everything is getting to be to lenient and turning to crap.

  • 10 years ago

    by Erika

    OMG!!! i think that this is a brilliant poem. i am struck speechless. i'm not sure what you are doing, but what ever it is, it sure as hell is working!

  • 10 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Oh my god wow... the words in your poem are the truest i have seen in so long, that is so true, isnt it unbelievable how that shit can just happen and the law will stand by and just watch it happen, i was raped you see and yeah i went to court and everything and he didnt even get time. your whole poem has a fantastic meaning to it, its really good, i hope you win the poetry contgest with this one lol have a good day

    xoxo Lucy

  • 10 years ago

    by Eibutsina

    I love powerful pieces like this with political messages that provoke deep thought...fabulous job here its real and its about reality and thats what captivated me the most - good job!

  • 10 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    A very powerful poem. I felt some of the ending lines in stanzas were a bit too long and made the flow choppy, but it was a good message and the rhyme was good and the flow was good, just could have been a bit better. I definitely rate this a five because it's powerful. Good job!
    Charisma*

  • 10 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    Thanks for writing this poem, it is amazingly penned and flows well yet still retains an amazing message and has such a valid point. i too, don't understand how this is justice, well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Christina Gomes

    Wow that was amazing

  • 10 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    Well said. Sad, but true <33

  • 10 years ago

    by Jasmyn

    Excellent

  • 10 years ago

    by Trampled Angel

    This poem was incredible. I am almost speechless. It is difficult to have a court system that is decided on such a case to case issue thing, because you're right. The innocent man can go to jail, while the one who did the crime is never even questioned about it. I wish something could be done, but right now I don't have too many suggestions besides working harder to stop the problems from happening. Though our justice system is far from perfect, it is one of the best on a global scale. Still, for all our talk of justice, it is hardly ever fair.

    ~Miko~

  • 10 years ago

    by Emma!!!

    Wow this is good, and very true well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Colby

    Very unique and i liked it a lot. Another.... its all so true. Good job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by MorbidCupcake

    This is so good! It should be americas anthem.

  • 10 years ago

    by Chelsey

    "Seems like the law needs updating
    Innocents need protecting more
    If no one does something soon
    The whole world will surely blow."
    ^^That was my favorite part, mainly because its true.
    The whole poem is true.
    It just proves that society recently sucks.
    That we need to improve what we have instead of making more of what we dont need.
    It was a very good poem, that got straight to the point, and gave wonderful examples on what you mean.

    xoxo
    --Chelsey

  • 10 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Another fantastic eye opener, i really enjoyed reading this one it was well layed out and easy readable xxx alex xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Sweet Disposition

    5/5 Really powerful and thought provoking.

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    It's been a while since I seen someone come out with such a stark message in your work it's refreshing to see. I loved it I gave it a 5 Plot121

  • 9 years ago

    by Krysten

    After reading this poem...my mind is screaming at me...WOW. i mean everything youve said is true, but amzingly you have taken hard facts and shped them in to smothing painfully beautiful. amzing. wonderful. not sure what else to say...

    my fave lines are

    A girl got two and a half years
    When she defended herself in a fight
    Yet the rapist got only six months
    Someone tell me how this is right?

    b/c an incent like this happend to one of my good friends....

    aniother exelent poem