Oh my god wow... the words in your poem are the truest i have seen in so long, that is so true, isnt it unbelievable how that shit can just happen and the law will stand by and just watch it happen, i was raped you see and yeah i went to court and everything and he didnt even get time. your whole poem has a fantastic meaning to it, its really good, i hope you win the poetry contgest with this one lol have a good day
A very powerful poem. I felt some of the ending lines in stanzas were a bit too long and made the flow choppy, but it was a good message and the rhyme was good and the flow was good, just could have been a bit better. I definitely rate this a five because it's powerful. Good job!
This poem was incredible. I am almost speechless. It is difficult to have a court system that is decided on such a case to case issue thing, because you're right. The innocent man can go to jail, while the one who did the crime is never even questioned about it. I wish something could be done, but right now I don't have too many suggestions besides working harder to stop the problems from happening. Though our justice system is far from perfect, it is one of the best on a global scale. Still, for all our talk of justice, it is hardly ever fair.
"Seems like the law needs updating
Innocents need protecting more
If no one does something soon
The whole world will surely blow."
^^That was my favorite part, mainly because its true.
The whole poem is true.
It just proves that society recently sucks.
That we need to improve what we have instead of making more of what we dont need.
It was a very good poem, that got straight to the point, and gave wonderful examples on what you mean.
After reading this poem...my mind is screaming at me...WOW. i mean everything youve said is true, but amzingly you have taken hard facts and shped them in to smothing painfully beautiful. amzing. wonderful. not sure what else to say...
my fave lines are
A girl got two and a half years
When she defended herself in a fight
Yet the rapist got only six months
Someone tell me how this is right?
b/c an incent like this happend to one of my good friends....