Wow, the thing I love about this poem I that its all based on true facts. It saddens me that this is reality and what you have written is basically all true!
"The mother who abandoned her kids
Got only a measly fine
The murderer got three years
He's treated like it wasn't a serious crime."
This stanza is great, I love how you compare things, the rhyming and the word choice is perfect.
"The monster's who abused their child
Between them, didn't even get one year
Just a few months is supposed to make up
For all the time that child lived in fear."
Again this is a great stanza. Yet it brought tears to my eyes because I have seen what it can do to a person and I hate that they can ruin the life of a child/young adult and not get punished.
"Seems like the law needs updating
Innocents need protecting more"
I agree the law is pathetic, people need to open their eyes and punish those who should be punished!
"Bullies who drove someone to suicide
They didn't get punished at all
Seems like everyone's content so sit back
And just watch our society fall."
Amazing way to end the poem, truly greatly written! The word choice you used and the imagery you created were perfect and this poem is one of the best ones I have read, for the reasons of what it is based on and the imagery you have created, it deserves more than a 5!
Wow, hunny... i sooo agree with you... SOOOOO agree with this poem. i am adding this to my favorites.
it is sickening to know how those who get it easy are those who really did the most damage. i like how you talked about bullies...
those do the most damage, especially in grade school...
great poetry here.
this is true and real and it deserves a 5.
Wow I never thought about it like that. While I agree that every crime especially the ones that you have described in this poem should have some sort of repercussions attached to them I think that the system is messed up and they should reevaluate how much time is spent for each. I liked how you showed many different situations where the laws fall short instead of just complaining you gave examples. I think that my favorite part was the beginning you caught my interest and changed my views with that very first stanza after that was finished I was hooked and had to read the rest of the poem. And the title is a perfect fit.