Comments : A tribute to Emo

  • 10 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a really good poem David. 5/5
    Most EMO's feel like that they cant talk to people as they wont understand. But sometimes all they need is someone who they can talk to and that they wont judge them. I know cause I have a couple of friends like that.

    Any way GREAT POEM. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 10 years ago

    by Darien

    I thought this was a funny poem, just because you throw the word emo out so openly. I basically have a different concept of what 'emo' means. But I understand where you are coming from. A good write, a nice tribute.

  • 10 years ago

    by Mousie

    That was good, i like the stand you took, some ppl need that. great job, i really like that poem, you had a great flow and a great use of wording nice job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    What a wonderful poem.
    Great job.

  • 10 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    I really liked this poem.
    You did a good job.
    5/5
    take care!

    ~Chelsea

  • 10 years ago

    by Gothic Princess

    David,
    thx for taking a stand for all us Emo kids out there, it means a lot, though I have stopped cutting almost a year ago, its cool to just write emo things and be emo. thanks for writing this, it is really inspiring to at least know someone is here for us and for me.

    ~*Rhianon*~

  • 10 years ago

    by Dee

    Very nice. i liked the rhyming and the choice of words. and i liked the message you put out. very nice poem!

  • 10 years ago

    by Tammie

    The message put in this poem is really kind of you David. It's nice to see some people don't hate emo's for what they are stereotyped for, and understand some people are genuinely depressed. The flow was good and rhyming natural.
    The only critique I might have for this is to use a bit of a wider vocabulary. It always has more impact in the poem. An excellent poem though.

    5/5 from me.

    Tammie

  • 10 years ago

    by Static

    Hey dave, another popular poem i see. Hmm emos.. gotta say im not one to like em. If you feel depressed then ur not emo ur depressed. People that try to become 'emo' are not depressed otherwise we would call em depressed. Think about it. I dnt like using it as a derogitary term for people with problems. That is why i dnt like emos. Hope that makes sense. Other then that good poem

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Woah this was creative David! I really liked it...Personally I think sometimes people say there emo and it's wierd but you made it clear to help...I loved it!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jochsey

    Good work dave :)

  • 10 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Well, personally, I thought it was very well done. Except for a few places I thought needed some fixing up. Just minor, don't worry =P

    [{Yet} e m o ' s please hear me]
    ^^Suggestion: {Let} Change 'yet' to 'let.' It just seems more logical to me to change it to that instead of 'yet.' But if you don't want to change it, by all means keep it the same.

    [How life been so cruel
    How you want them to burn!]
    ^^Suggestion: I would try to fit these lines into 2 different ones. I know it's hard, making flow AND good rhymes, but it is possible. =P It would just help these 2 lines from going from something...to something else.

    Now that I've totally critiqued the format of this poem, I mind as well start on the emotion put into it. I see that you want to help emos. And I totally believe why you want to put forth this emotion for them. But technically, you cannot do anything about it. They brought this trauma upon themselves, and no one except them can help themselves. They have to get out of the emotional hole that they have dug themselves into. It's not your responsibility to keep them from cutting or harming themselves in another matter. =)

    As you can see, I was critical with this, but I really did like it. There was a great flow that interpreted well with this poem. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 10 years ago

    by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX

    Wonderful poem. U did a really good job on this poem and it was very kind of u to write this poem about emo's. I loved the flow of it. Keep up the good work. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I LOVE this.
    It was such a refreshing read and the first stanza was such a great opening.
    I loved the last line I thought it had huge impact and was such a perfect ending.
    Wonderful work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, how sweet. Its an interesting topic and I like how you've written it. It has good flow, nice descripitons, and good emotion. Nice job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Aaaaaaahhhhhh!!! (you know that sound that you hear when the sky opens up and angels come down? well, tht's what that was supposed to sound like)

    Anyways... this is a really beautiful poem, it's so unique too! great job! there's this one line that doesn't make sense to me...
    "How life been so cruel"
    i don't get it, maybe you meant "how life HAS been so cruel, or How life CAN BE so cruel"
    that's the only thing i was confused about... so... yea, i like the rhyming and the whole message of it. i know exactly what you're saying.
    great job!
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Poetess

    I actually liked this poem. I thought it was gonna be like a funny type poem. But...it wasnt. Lol. I liked the ending especially. Nice write! Keep writing! 5/5

    ` Liz

  • 10 years ago

    by Kelsey

    Great poem.
    It was nicely written and it had good emotion in it too.
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Nicely written. Enjoyed it.....good structure and flow. All the best, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    It was nice to see a very generous poem. I like how you express your sympathy for "Emos" and want to help them. I don't really like the term "Emo". Like what Static said, if you're depressed, then you're known as being "depressed", not "Emo". An "Emo" is just a stereotype that people say they are. Therefore I looked at your poem as if you were talking to a depressed person, which made me enjoy it more.

    Very well done.