I thoroughly can understand how you feel about losing a dear friend. It depressed me immensely. And it always seems that I'm in bad luck in regards to friendships. Nice work nonetheless.

This poem is similar to a lot of other friendship poems that I have read...and it's pretty typical to lose a friend due to a boyfriend, change in personality, growing up and moving on with your life. You have captured readers everywhere with this familiar poem, great job, keep it up. 5/5 -unattractive1

Ugh. I can so relate to this.
Doesn't it suck? I feel for you sweetie. That is if this is true, it seems as if it is.

The flow was a bit off, but other than that it was a great poem.
I liked the last stanza the most, I guess.
Because, it seemed as if you were sad over her victory, but able to accept it and quit with the drama (fighting).

Keep it up. :D
5/5

I know what it feels like to lose friends...it'll be ok. Wonderful poem great read though! This is one of my favourites so far!!

5/5 ;)

Once again, well done.
So sad and I hope you will find
someone. Or at least I hope this
isn't true. WElld one! God Bless 5/5
4/6
<3Tay(^__^)

Great write, I enjoyed the read. The flow as well as the structure was good. The rhyme in this poem was excellent, keep on writing, you're talented.

This line, "Up all night, and sleep all day." should either be changed to, "Up all night, and slept all day." OR "Up all night, and sleeping all day." because the way you have it, you are contradicting yourself with present and past tenses, try to keep it the same tense.

In this line, "Someone now who's just like you." did you mean "now" or "new" from the way I read it, it should be "new"

Also this line, "She's one you now, she did succeed." I don't think you meant "one" for it is the number, I think you meant "won" meaning winning (or in the case of this poem, Winning her over you) Therefore the line should read, "She's won you now, she did succeed."

Peace, Joe

She's one you now, she did succeed.

One should be won
Other that that i think you did an excellent job on this poem. the emtion was clear, and the flow was good. well penned 5/5

This is almost too simple, but it sends the message very clearly...nice job!