Awh. This is really good, you did a great job with writing it. I love how easily it flows and everything. I can relate really well to it, with the boy I am dating at this current time. Very nicely done.
"I use to think that love could never come my way.
Love use to feel like a burden weighing me down.
Everyone seemed so unhappy with what love does.
And I never wanted that feeling to come around."
"You kept me safe when I was daunted from this life."
This relates to my life alot. Great poem--it was descriptive yet understandable as well.
Ok, well the poem wasn't bad. However, I suggest that you fix the syllable count. Just because lines end rhyming doesn't mean the flow will be perfect. Also a suggestion, each line seemed to sprout out of no where. Try to keep the lines focused like you would a stanza. This will help keep the writing from becoming confusing. All things considered the poem is well on its way to becoming great. And the errors were minimal and harmless. I rate it 4/5.
Wow, u r awsome with your poems, this one i can relate to it alot, i use to not believe in love, i use to always make fun of lovers too,lol. until one day her hazel eyes made me fall and since then i never could get up...
you are so talented....... keep it up