Comments : What Can I Say

  • 11 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    This is a good poem, good flow, nice rhythm but the only thing is:

    "Or that's I'm jealous"

    That not thats

    sorry but I had to correct it lol anyways great poem, keep it up!

  • 11 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    ........It's kinda...missing something. In a way there's question of what it is about but at the same time you know what it's about. The words are what brings this down because it could be expressed better than it is. Just my thought on it. The first stanza had a nice touch to it though.

  • 11 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Oh, this was so sweet ashlie, i really hope he is getting better so that you guys can be happy, you made the poem flow so smoothly and the wording was beautiful 5/5