I loved it, I would also like to hear it as a song. It flowed nicely though, as well as kept my attention all the way through it.. Wonderful job. Keep up the good work. 5/5 =)
-Ally

I absolutly adore this piece of work.
Keep it up!

- Mandee

Excellent. I love this peice, I would love to hear it as a song, but I think you did a really good job. 5/5

Haha I really liked this poem! Although I think the word "boy" was slightly overused, the line "this may seem a little stereotypical, but it's a stereotypical world" has so much truth to it. Good job! 5/5

~jas~

Aww like really really good! Would love to hear it as a song yes :) Love these lyrics :)

Hmmm...i would really like to here the tune to this song...but I like it alot...i like the idea expressed in it and how it kind've rhymes but not really...it keeps it from sounding corny...good work...
Jonda Beth

Wonderful lyrics. you definately did a great job on this. the flow and i think the rythem was great.

And, I don't like
Your hair in that mess,
lookin' like you just gotta outta bed.
Your clothes that tight;
Boy, it just ain't right.
No, we're not meant to be.
The world the can't see you with me.

this was really good and i liked it most. But for the last line, i think you should take out "the" from in between "world" and "can't".

besides that the whole song was great. 5/5 keep up the great work.

Wonderful lyrics. you definately did a great job on this. the flow was really good and i think the rythem was great.*

sorry i made a mistake, my bad.

Exclent job great flow and i could picture a mid-tempo beat a real top 20's pop feel

I really like how your song related the real world, to how you felt that you needed to conform to it and how the relations really came out. i enjoyed reading this piece. thanks you
could you please comment my poem? any pick would be fine, thanks!!!

Wow, I really liked this. I love songs and such about how the world is stereotypical and judgemental.. Excellently written..

Sole. x

Cool 5/5